What Makes a Great Personal Statement? (Part 3 of 3)

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    This is part three of a three part series. Read part one, part two.

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    What Makes a Great Personal Statement? (Part 3 of 3)

    We’ll continue evaluating our personal statement from part two and show you how to turn an average essay into an excellent one.

    Sample Personal Statement:

    Sample Personal Statement

    The sample essay has now been revised and edited below. Our editors refine your essay so that the original voice remains and it is ready-to-submit after we return it to you. It is extremely important that your personal statement describes the same person that you convey during your interview.

    A concise thesis statement is added to the sample essay in order to improve the essay’s overall organization and flow. The applicant does a nice job of addressing his changed study habits without detracting from the rest of the essay. The reasons for wanting to become a dentist are portrayed throughout the essay while the applicant sheds insight on his background and personality. Some of the original word choice and language are changed to create a more concise essay.

    Revised Personal Statement:

    Revised Personal Statement
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